You have an introduction that grabs attention. The essay has a thesis but unclear. There are topic sentences that support the thesis. In the body paragraph, you summarize the details instead of analyze them. You should use present tense to discuss literature. Try to not repeat words and work harder on grammar.
you had a good introduction by using a quote from Ho Chi Minh. But in my opinion, market economy isn't the most developed economy but i respect for what you wrote. Your essay is easy to understand and well describing. You also gave a clear evidence in the body paragraph. Overall i think you did pretty well on this essay.
You have an introduction that grabs attention. The essay has a thesis but unclear. There are topic sentences that support the thesis. In the body paragraph, you summarize the details instead of analyze them. You should use present tense to discuss literature. Try to not repeat words and work harder on grammar.
ReplyDeleteyou had a good introduction by using a quote from Ho Chi Minh. But in my opinion, market economy isn't the most developed economy but i respect for what you wrote. Your essay is easy to understand and well describing. You also gave a clear evidence in the body paragraph. Overall i think you did pretty well on this essay.
ReplyDeleteYou have a very good thesis. I really like your support evidence be cause it strong and clear.
ReplyDeleteYOu have the good evidence . That use Gdp to show the economic of China and America.
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